Talk:Fateless: Chapter 1/@comment-1719188-20130707174126

I liked the chapter, but it honestly wasn't my favorite. I had some problems with the sentence/paragraph structures. Some of the sentences were worded strangely or it seemed to run on, and a few of the paragraphs could have been divided up better (I personally don't like when paragraphs run on and on when they could be split up. Maybe one or two long paragraphs, but when there's several, it tends to be harder to follow).

The overall plot and events in the chapter are good, though, it did tend to get a bit confusing at times and I had to reread a few places, but most of it I was able to understand. I'd personally give 6 3/4 out of 10.