Talk:Where the Self Resides/@comment-1270096-20160312030553

Very very well done on this story, Leaf. The way you weave the English language together to form worlds and people is really quite remarkable. One of this story's best attributes is the protagonist, Sam, and her development across the plot of the story as a whole. Her development from the extremely introverted and distrusting individual at the start of the story and her gradual growth into the more content, emotionally accessible (to a degree) person at the end is rather deftly and subtly done so that it is extraordinarily believable. This is especially notable in the latter half of Wtsr. However this does expose a flaw in the story, which is, well, the story of the story. Aside from Sam's development, there never really seems to be an incredibly urgent objective or driving motivation short of stay alive for any of the characters.

On another note, the descriptive language is freaking beautiful throughout the entire thing, and you can really feel the characters' emotions and thoughts quite realistically all throughout. I mean, it got me to be whispering "KISS. KISSSSSSS" at one point. This does it make difficult to bond with non-Sam characters, right up until she starts to open up a bit to others. The tenses of things take a bit of getting used to, however, given the third person narrative. This doesn't hinder the story at all, so it isn't too much of an issue.

Overall, wtsr is a very enjoyable, gorgeously written piece of art that really makes you feel for and with the characters within. Though the slight lack of an overarching plot can be hindering at times, the character development makes up for it in spades.

Wtsr is one of my favorite stories on this site, and it's one of your best.

SAMAH FOREVER.