Talk:On the Dying Horizon/@comment-1452857-20160312040240

overall, this is a lovely story and a nice reprieve from his predecessor. i really like the emotional journey zoe goes through, but i have to admit i think you could have delved into her psyche a bit more. overall, though, it's very nice and tells quite a bit about her as a character, and i appreciate it as something that was v necessary for her character growth.

i really like the new characters in this and how zoe interacts with them. (especially carly and maya because they have the most interesting personalities). i only wish zoe would have interacted with other characters more than a select few, and while i understand why you don't get as attached to them which is relatively unfortunate considering certain events in atmbc.

certain things happen rather suddenly which i think would have benefitted as being written as gradual processes, but that could just be personal preference. regardless, i like how zoe adapts to the main universe, the lighthearted moments and not, and upon rereading this i appreciate the foreshadowing gone into the early portions of the fic.

the action scenes are just as enjoyable to read as uavbs, and once again i have to say that you're really good at writing them.

overall a v enjoyable fic, and it's obvious you've improved a lot from the previous iteration of this + uavbs. zoe's journey is definitely one of my favorites, on this wiki or regardless