Talk:The Prince of Time Chapter 21

I think this chapter was quite good, but the only problem I had with it, was when James stammered. The long lines of periods we're unnecessary, usually three is fine. I think it would have suited better if they we're replaced with either commas', or em dashes, which symbolizes a cut off part of a sentance, which is what James happen to be doing. Example: He was Cain, Ulysses, the Flying Dutchman; he was Lot in Sodom, Deirdre of the Sorrows, Sweeney in the nightingales among trees. He was the miracle ingredient Z-147. He was—

"Crazy!" Clevinger interrupted, shrieking. "That's what you are! Crazy!" "—immense. I'm a real, slam-bang, honest-to-goodness, three-fisted humdinger. I'm a bona fide supraman."

But other then that, the plot is lovely.