User blog:Darkcloud1111/Fastest Hero Alive: My first story

Hello, I have started my first story and posted it today. I've never really done anything like this before so I was hoping to get some reviews before I started another chapter. The story can be found here. It follows Nolan Swift, a son of Hermes who has to travel to the Underworld to gather the supplies needed to save the life of his friend (girlfriend, the story hasn't gotten that far). Anyway, and comment will help me deside which way the story will go