Talk:World War Demigod

(This is late)

Hey Ers, so far this is really good! :D

I really hope theres more char' development in the future. Cos the char' so far are forgettable and I keep forgeting who the characters are sometimes.

Also the paragraph seperation, paragraph are kinda too long. Here's a tip I got from my old teacher. For everytime you put a new inverted comma, start a new paragraph, unless its the words from the same person. Also try not to have a paragraph to have more than 6 lines. It gets kinda gets clumped together and kinda hard to read.

So..thats All i have to say. so...review over :D

Christopher Fauns~ Arrow of Nyx  16:42, March 2, 2013 (UTC)