User blog comment:~Angel Wings~/Insomnia/@comment-883664-20110316215822

Fairly nice poem. But I feel if you're going to break few words you establish some sort of pattern. Like 1 word 1 word 2 words. And if you have something going on with stressed/unstressed syllables or with rhyme it would make it even better. You want to get that sort of beat/flow to make the poem really stick in people's minds.

And on insomnia: You should try quiet calming music, meditation, and if niether of these works, consult a professional. Not sleeping = not good. As is obvious.

I'm lucky. Five second after I put my head on the pillow I'm fast asleep. No really, I love it. And I never wake up and I never have dreams or nightmares. (Save for once in a blue moon). Life can be the same for you too. You just have to put your mind to it and act as is relevant.

-Mator