Talk:The Power of Darkness/@comment-5981785-20130414214024

I liked it. But there was a lot of spelling mistakes. You seem to be switching from First Person to Third and sometimes even second person. Also, it seems like you jump to the present while you're writing in Past tense. I see a lot of good points in this story. But it's all bundled up and written all in different ways. If you want, I could fix it for you. But I don't know if I would ruin what you made or what your vision was.