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So in an effort to force myself to read more and because I lack both conviction and disclipline to read by myself, I shall give myself a reason to read.

So I'm going to be reviewing stories, whoo.

Just so you know before you jump the boat and enter your story, I can be harsh but not unfair. Just ask anyone who has received a proper review from me.

Also note when I review something, it would be strictly a narrative review. Meaning I will only review the story, not grammar or anything like that.

So if you want your story to be reviewed, post it below.

Pending Reviews: Edit

 * 1) Eternal Destiny: The Man in Black arc
 * 2) Give Me a Chance
 * 3) Rise of the Night

Completed Reviews:Edit
1. The Man in Black Arc: Well the main problem with this review was that...well you made me read half way into the story; I'm immediately thrown into this world with no idea who these characters are. Which brings up the first problem I have, there isn't really characterisation even for the main characters. All characters sort of, blend into one another. None of them are really memorable except Fred (and that's because he had two chapters devoted to his past) and Roy with his constant 'with all due respect'.

I can’t tell Mike from Dana most of the time, there is just too many characters without anything to separate them. Another thing that blends together is pacing. Everything just…happens.

There is no time for the scene to sink in, for example the reveal of Naga exchanging the contents with a bomb, the reveal just…happens. No build-up and again; no time for the action to sink in. Honestly I just thought, ‘who the heck is Naga?’ when I first read it.

Despite its flaws, it does however have its plus points. It follows the proper format of a narrative and the story was good in a whole.

2. Give Me a Chance: A solid one-shot. I had to re-read some parts because I couldn't understand what was going on sometimes but it wasn't that hard to get back on track. Though its kinda weird that he was her brother in another life and loves her romantically in another. Heart-wrentching honestly, almost brought a tear but eh, all in all good job.

A blade will never betray you[http://percyjacksonfanfiction.wikia.com/wiki/User_talk:ArchieScotts so pay them a little more respect alright? ]15:42, March 19, 2014 (UTC)