Talk:Josh: Chapter 1-3

This is more of comment than a topic, really...

No offence intended, when I say I find the story a bit odd, and some things sound misplaced. I haven't read the whole thing, but so far, I know that Josh is short (hasn't grown since age eleven...) This is an interesting concept, no doubt - it kept me reading. But still - I mean, I don't know if you'll ever explain WHY Josh is so short, but I really wish that, (if you DID explain this, that is,) you would say WHY he's so short sooner in the story - enough not for readers to think it's pointless. Not that I have anything against short people and characters, but so far I think you've centred around his height TOO much, so that it's taking over the story. Also, I think it's a good idea, in a way, making him be in college, (since it indicates that he has survived to adulthood,) but the way Josh meets Layla seems unrealistic to me. Personally, when I read that scene, even though you already said Josh was a grown man, (just of shorter stature,) I invisioned a kid about six or seven years old being nurtured by a grade-sixer when Layla squeezed his hand, (though she is the same age as him. In my opinion, if she REALLY wanted to be GENUINE friends with Josh, she wouldn't have babied him by squeezing his hand - that only makes Josh look MORE vunerable. AGAIN: NOTHING AGAINST SHORT PEOPLE WHATSOEVER. I LOVE THE WAY YOU CAPTURED MY ATTENTION - JUST ADD DETAIL TO THE REASONS OF HIM BEING SHORT EARLY, EARLY ON IN THE STORY...