Talk:Morbus Pācis/@comment-3389778-20130709112210

I've read through this story so far and I gotta say. It's pretty awesome.

The intro to the story was short and established the character's goals well. That said, Metus is a damn good character. Sarcastic, annoying with his words and speaks with a intagible pride which is good considering his view of mortals.

Though however, that's where this story is lacking (imo), the other characters. The status quo hasn't really been set up with them. I know they're all friends and two pairs of the five like each other, but other than that not much.

This is obvious when I come back to the story to read it another time where I'm like "Metus is a cool guy." and go "Who's Acadia(or the other characters) again?"

Though it's still fairly early in the story, but I'm hoping the characters are given more depth later on.

Overall, It's good. Keep up the good work guys.