Talk:Paradiso: Ch. 1/@comment-5636540-20130403020335

A couple grammatical errors, but this is very intruguing. (However you spell that.) I liked your in depth and straight to the point style. Most stories here, don't FEEL like a real story. If you get what I mean, but this dead. It felt like one of the books that would be published alongside Moby Dick on the shelf. Keep it up!